Discussion pieces

Page note: In this page I will be posting all of my rough draft pieces that I write with Mr. Johnson during our discussions that I would not normally post on my blog. These pieces will only have grammatical edits in it. Enjoy!

Author's note: During one of my discussions Mr. Johnson gave us a scene and we had to try to write our way out of the problem and create some kind of solution. The scene was in the forest and the problem that you woke up in the forest and there was a bear standing over your bed. 

I shield my eyes from the bright sun that has awoken me from a great sleep. Slowly but surely I move my hand away from my tired eyes to get used to this unusually bright sun that is seeping through my window when all of a sudden I hear a tremendous roar that jolts me out of my bed. When I hit the ground I open my eyes and see the most peculiar thing. I am surrounded by trees in a thick, flourishing forest.

I slowly sit up still confused as to why I am in a forest I notice what the sound was that had jolted me out of my safe bed… It was a giant black bear. I let out a little shriek of freight as I jump up and head back into my bed for cover. The bear stands on his two hind legs and swings at my bed and hit it. I go flying and I hit my head on a tree. Instantly I get a massive headache and I get super dizzy. I shoot up only to black out only for a few seconds from how hard I hit my head. I start sprinting as fast as I can away from the bear tripping over tree roots in the ground.

I keep running through the underbrush and fly out into a nice cool river. Immediately I let out a sigh of relief on how nice the cold water felt on my burning body. I just float for a few minutes until I hear crashing noises coming from below me. I quickly try to stand in the little river but to my dismay the river had deepened while I was floating and relaxing. I quickly try to see what the crashing noises were and saw the one thing that scared me even more than the bear…. I was about to go down a waterfall.

I quickly doggie paddle to the side of the river that has magically widened during my rest. I try to jump out of the water and grab onto a branch, but to unfortunately my hand were either to slippery to get a good hold onto a branch or the branch wasn't strong enough to hold me up. I turn my head to see how much time I had left and see that the waterfall was a mere 100 yards away. I let out a loud whimper as I realize I probably will not make this .

Suddenly I see a large rock right in the middle of the river glistening in the light. I start to swim to the rock using all the power I had left and reach the location of it right before the current sweeps me away from I to my doom. I haul my soaking wet body onto the warm rock and laid there heaving my chest up and down trying to catch my breath.  As the sun baked down onto me and starting to dry my clothes I drift off into a deep sleep.

I slowly awake m my deep slumber with my lips cracking apart from being so dry and my fingers look like giant prunes. My eyes open up as wide as my face and I start to gasp for water, which thanks to the sun I desperately need. I throw me head into the water and take gulps of it as feel the sides of my mouth curve up in pleasure of having delicious ice cold water enter my system and cool me down. I whip my head back out of the water feeling more rejuvenated than I have ever felt before. I stand up on the rock and I can now see the bottom of the waterfall. I notice that it is not as big as I thought and I looked like one of those waterfalls people jump off of in the movies. I step into the water now finding that the water level has lowered to where now I can stand with half my body still over the water I walk up to the edge of the water fall and pencil jump over it. I feel a burst of adrenaline as I feel the cool wind whip my hair above my head like I am in a roller coaster. I feel the cool bottom lagoon as my feet meet the water and as the rest of my body quickly sinks under. I keep descending until I hit the bottom of the little lake with my feet, and push my feet against the grainy sand and fly up towards the surface.  

Author's note: Recently Mr. Johnson and I had worked on something where I turn one of my pieces into a poem. To start me off we chose one of my paragraphs in my piece and I converted it into a poem. I will first off write the paragraph then underneath the paragraph I will post the poem. The poem will be a free verse poem to show more emotions. 

My Piece:

I open up the card and start to read the letter. It has been given to me to read and enjoy forever.  The edges of the card are slowly disintegrating, and the writing on the inside is slowly fading. It is getting harder to read the inside, but I know it all by heart, because this letter explains me.

The piece converted into a poem:

I open up the card

Given to me to read and enjoy forever.

The edges of the card,

Old with time,

Are slowly disintegrating.

The writing on the inside,

Slowly faded away,

Gets harder to read.

Fingerprints cover the faded writing,

But I know it all by heart,

As the poem knows me.